Kai ora,
In Week 7, our class went to look at the outside of the old church building which is next to our school. We had to write using lots of adjectives, adverbs, specific nouns and vivid verbs so that we described it well. We tried to remember to use ideas from our senses and to write about not just what we thought the old church looked like but also how it made us feel.
You have used a good range of adjectives and adverbs to describe the old church and you have also talked about the way the church made you feel. I think you haven't been quite careful enough though, with your publishing. There are quite a few mistakes in spelling, punctuation and grammar.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Zavier. I see you responded to my previous message and fixed your mistakes.
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